2010 King of the Hammers. Glory embodied.

[HeavyMetal]

There is talk of magazine work in the future on the east coast for me, so I decided to write something up with my best foot forward to sell myself on article work.

Sorry for the KOH spamming all, but its been the ticket lately, and this (sis) is where I post most of my shit first.

Take a look, it isnt very long at all. I hope its entertaining or a good read at least.

http://heavymetalconcepts.wordpress....ce-in-writing/

[Magilla]

not too shabby

[JoeNitro]

cool

[Burton58]

i noticed the usage of this word in the story

this is very much a win.

oh and good luck

[Henchman]

That was freakin sweet

[HeavyMetal]

i noticed the usage of this word in the story

this is very much a win.

oh and good luck

SIS REFERENCE FTW!

[Burton58]

SIS REFERENCE FTW!

SIS is like roofies. gotta slip it in somehow











































yes thats what she said

[Magilla]

SIS is like roofies. gotta slip it in somehow
yes thats what she said

Who ever "she" is she really sounds like a whore, where do i meet her

[Burton58]

Who ever "she" is she really sounds like a whore, where do i meet her

new freakin jersey. careful though, they bite

[Magilla]

new freakin jersey. careful though, they got weird diseases there is no cure for besides fire

fixed

[Burton58]

fixed

agreed. all were started at rutgers

[HeavyMetal]

[Hydra]

"The greatest event in rock-sports., and arguably for some, in motorsports."

The period after "rock-sports"

"...it was time to check all ill-will and differences at the door, it was race time."

I feel the last clause should be independant, not so much an editing error, just preference.

Sorry, but being an english major I figured I give a second view and some constructive criticism. The rest of it was very good, excellent consistency and was impressingly uncliche for being a piece focused on such a specific genre

[Admin]

"The greatest event in rock-sports., and arguably for some, in motorsports."

The period after "rock-sports"

"...it was time to check all ill-will and differences at the door, it was race time."

I feel the last clause should be independant, not so much an editing error, just preference.

Sorry, but being an english major I figured I give a second view and some constructive criticism. The rest of it was very good, excellent consistency and was impressingly uncliche for being a piece focused on such a specific genre

its all good, thanks for the help..dunno how i missed that period either....

edit: fawk, admin name haha

[#DEZERTDAD]

Good job!