2010 King of the Hammers. Glory embodied.

[Hydra]

well received by who? the wheeling community or a journalist or editor?

it sounds a little forced to me, theres a flow thats certainly there but there are a few phrases, lines, words, etc that seem like you put them there bc you wanted to use some epic sounding phrase over something simpler.

i mean, i understand that may be your style, or that may be what the editor is looking for, but a huge part of this sort of writing.. this unprofessional, short sentenced style of writing which is gaining a lot of popularity recently will fall flat on it's face without good flow.

take whatever i say with a grain of salt i guess.

i see where youre coming from. One of the things article editors like is pieces that are concise. the descriptive eloborativeness of this peice is almost good enough to be a portion of a piece of literature.

all adams trying to say/advise is that although being eloquent sounds very literary, sometimes it becomes too wordy

[HeavyMetal]

the descriptive eloborativeness of this peice is almost good enough to be a portion of a piece of literature.

i guess this more what i am going for instead of an actual "article" anyway, i didnt know what to call it

[Hydra]

i guess this more what i am going for instead of an actual "article" anyway, i didnt know what to call it

alright, well thats where my main criticism would come from

so youre shooting for less of a paper/mag article and more of a journal type thing

[HeavyMetal]

alright, well thats where my main criticism would come from

so youre shooting for less of a paper/mag article and more of a journal type thing

i dont really know what i am shooting for to be honest as far as writing genre or whatever

i wrote it to entertain and paint a picture via my words of the experience of king of the hammers...i didnt forsee it filling the shoes of an informative experience article or anything of that sort..creative writing i suppose would be the best suited title for this.

http://www1.pirate4x4.com/forum/showthread.php?t=866089

[Hydra]

creative writing i suppose would be the best suited title for this.

then you succeed

[HeavyMetal]

then you succeed

we will see in a few weeks

[Trailer Ray]

sweet man. you got a ton of great responses from the guys on pirate. good for you. hopefully this will be a big part of where hmc could be going in the future

[HeavyMetal]

sweet man. you got a ton of great responses from the guys on pirate. good for you. hopefully this will be a big part of where hmc could be going in the future

i really hope so...all about branching out and putting yourself out there....for better and for worse haha

[Hydra]

i really hope so...all about branching out and putting yourself out there....for better and for worse haha

<<<<<< future HMC Industries staff writer (?)

[HeavyMetal]

<<<<<< future HMC Industries staff writer (?)

Anything is possible.

Seriously.

[Trailer Ray]

<<<<<< future HMC Industries staff writer (?)

ill take a sticker and be happy haha

[HeavyMetal]

Update

Just wanted to say...I will be shooting and writing for Crawl Magazine now on an RCQ article/trail ride with Ian Johnson, partly thanks to this submission

[Mike]

Congrats! Dont forget about us when you make it big in hollywood.

[Quartney]

congrats will!

[XJLI]

Congrats! Dont forget about us when you make it big in hollywood.

then whos paying the bills?

hollywood kid.

cool shit dude